Sport is becoming a business with high income for professionals and more companies have involved in financial and in other ways It is a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

Sport is becoming a business with high income for professionals and more companies have involved in financial and in other ways. It is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, sport commercialization has sparked controversy among the public. Although this trend is not without disadvantages, the upsides will justify these.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that there are some drawbacks of the business of sport. First, with a view to reaping the economic or politic benefits, stakeholders can make shady deals that ruin the primary value of sports. For example, in Sea Games 23, several talented players of Vietnam National Football team made sports fraud, leading to the loss of Vietnam, which is unfair for both other players and audiences. Second, by forcing players to play too many non-official matches in order to yield profits, private can make players suffer from serious injuries, such as bone fractures, which shortens their lifespan of careers.
Nevertheless, under no circumstances should the advantages be marginalized. First, if private companies sponsor for sports, the government can release itself from the burden on national budget. This means that commercial firms will replace government duties in investment and development of the sports sector, ranging from supreme sports equipment to medical support, which means the saved money will be harnessed in other key areas for the purpose of sustainable development. Second, since both professionals and companies can reap tangible benefits, the business of sports is a win- win strategy. In fact, on the one hand, the business of sport allows players to make a killing from endorsements or non- official matches, vice versa, companies also earn a big amount of profits thanks to entrance fees, advertisements and other services.
In conclusion, while sport business has certain disadvantages, the advantages can outweigh these. By imposing strict laws and policies, the authority can prevent such corporations from crossing the line.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2020-04-19 hanaselena 78 view
2020-03-23 chupika 78 view
Essays by user chupika :

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...es in investment and development of the sports sector, ranging from supreme sports equ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 624, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... win strategy. In fact, on the one hand, the business of sport allows players to ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, while, as for, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47202797203 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93436647783 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625874125874 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6328320207 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.384615385 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17315656213 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584000995581 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464718441375 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0888456912159 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582930211058 0.056905535591 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.