The diagram below shows information about member attendance in various clubs in a metro city

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The diagram below shows information about member attendance in various clubs in a metro city.

Here, we have a bar chart. The bar chart illustrate the information about members attendance in various clubs of
different nations in that metro city.

Overall, there are four type of nation club, French, British, American and Japanese clubs. Highest club members is in
USA, however, lowest club members is in Japan.

Firstly, British club have second highest members from January to May, it was steadily at 62000 members in all months.
In June that position was take over by French, in January to May it was 60000 to 62000 members. In June and July it
was reached at over the 70000 members. When American club was continuously increased members in all months, it was
over the 90000 members. However, in July it was fallen down and reached at 82000 members.

In addition, Japanese club was face an ups and downs in numbers of members, in January it was at less than 40000
members. After February month it was reached at 50000 members. In May, that percentage was fallen down and reached
at 42000 members and it was same in July.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Highest'.
Suggestion: The Highest
..., British, American and Japanese clubs. Highest club members is in USA, however, lowe...
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Line 4, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...panese clubs. Highest club members is in USA, however, lowest club members is in ...
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Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the lowest'.
Suggestion: , the lowest
...ighest club members is in USA, however, lowest club members is in Japan. Firstly, B...
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Line 8, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...00 to 62000 members. In June and July it was reached at over the 70000 members. W...
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Line 9, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... increased members in all months, it was over the 90000 members. However, in July...
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Line 12, column 113, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs, in January it was at less than 40000 members. After February month it was rea...
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Line 13, column 10, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ry it was at less than 40000 members. After February month it was reached at 50000 ...
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Line 13, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t percentage was fallen down and reached at 42000 members and it was same in July...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 871.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81215469613 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33412173936 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513812154696 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1017133898 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.5833333333 112.824112599 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0833333333 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 3.83414634146 287% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167306584321 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801286963801 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118826497775 0.0843802449381 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845403204443 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786916686664 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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