Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or
career before they decide the long term career of their life.
With the rapid development of modern day society, it becomes increasingly difficult to find a proper job due to the severe competition. This also leads to some individuals' career changing decision, which has became become a hot-debated issue recently. While a majority of people suggest we should treasure our present job and never change it, I hold that trying various jobs is actually worth it for the following reasons.
First and foremost, the experience we accumulate by doing different jobs can benefit our later work tremendously. As is known to all, people go to work not only for money's sake, but also for the purpose of having a wider range of work experience that can help them more adepted adept when they handle certain kinds of future challenges and difficulties in work, which will make them more excellent worker. For instance, my uncle worked as an a waiter in a hotel at first, where he boosted his communication skills. Then as an accounter accountant in a local company, which enabled him to deal with a large variety of accounting problems efficiently. Thanks to the experience of these two jobs, he became a qualified employee in his present company, and thus getting promoted quickly than his coworkers.
Another point worth mentioning is that people can truly know which job deserves their hard work and commitment for the rest of their life, as they can compare several jobs seriously. To state it more concisely, people tend to be satisfied with their first job if the salary is high enough. However, they hardly love that job and are unaware of it, since they lack other work opportunities to choose from. It is not hard to imagine if one do does the same work every day, he will easily feel bored, which stems from the lack of enthusiasm and zeal for his job. Nevertheless, provided that he had done several jobs before deciding his final job, he would choose the one he really enjoy. Therefore, as time pass by, he would still be motivated and work wholeheartedly when it comes to his interesting job.
Admittedly, one can be more professional if he sticks to one job from the very begining beginning. Nonetheless, the advantages of trying more jobs apparently outweigh never giving one more shot. To put it into a nutshell, considering the importance of accumulating different work experience as well as gaining more choice of occupation, people are well-advised to have various jobs in order to make their ultimate career successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...als career changing decision, which has became become a hot-debated issue recently. Wh...
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Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: an; a
...orker. For instance, my uncle worked as an a waiter in a hotel at first, where he bo...
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Line 3, column 804, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng promoted quickly than his coworkers. Another point worth mentioning is that p...
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Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'enjoys'.
Suggestion: enjoys
... job, he would choose the one he really enjoy. Therefore, as time pass by, he would s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91866028708 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77071916417 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574162679426 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.765012609 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.941176471 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192783205619 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626371693232 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464501889558 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116611991582 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398643184359 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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