People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Whether people’s behavior is determined by their internal or external forces has long been a contentious issue. The statement contends that external influence takes precedence over intrinsic determinants in determining one’s behavior. Certainly, the statement finds support in the fact that it’s human psychology to learn from their immediate surroundings and to develop attitude about certain things based on their own direct experiences and circumstances. However, this cannot be an excuse for someone’s misdemeanors as the role of free in one’s actions can never be underestimated.
Behavior can be defined as the way in which humans respond towards other in a given condition. From the childhood, humans have a tendency to simulate speech, movement, mannerism, etc. from others. This is the very mechanism by which they develop their language, ideas, social behavior, etc.; and hence they are called as great imitators. A person’s cultural, professional, economic and social surroundings in which he/she is brought up, or in fact live, shape his/her thinking and as a consequence his/her behavior which is inextricably linked to the former. For example, a child, who has seen domestic violence from his/her early days, will develop certain mindset related to it whether condemning or condoning. Similarly, a child who has grown up in a poor family without creature comforts such as good clothing, food, toys etc. is likely going to develop an urge to earn good money in order to provide those amenities to his generations.
Even, after we have matured, the environment and circumstances in which we live have a great influence on our behavior. It is for this solid reason that the adage ‘man is a social animal’ is etched out in our mind. For instance, in UK people use horn with utmost restraint unlike third world countries like Nepal. When a Nepalese citizen arrives in UK, he is naturally going to practice caution in blowing horns. Likewise, a rustic person in a professional environment would develop urbane ways of interaction over the time. On the other hand, when there is an outbreak of mob violence, even law abiding citizens have been found to commit ghastly crimes following something which is called ‘crowd mentality’ in social psychology.
However, other very important aspects of human psychology, whose influence on one’s behavior cannot be overlooked, are inner conscience and free will. As humans mature, the intellect grows and so does the capacity to make own decisions. Unlike an infant who is basically amoral, a grown up individual has a conscience to distinguish between right and wrong despite the environment where he/she is brought up or lives. Therefore, people bear accountability for their misdeeds which cannot be justified their misdeeds by citing external stimulus. Now, considering the same previous example of crowd violence, people have also been found providing great humanitarian aid to the victims contrary to the mob behavior. Similarly, while American pop culture is overtly sexual, there are individuals who indulge in abstinence, as for them sex becomes meaningless with ephemeral hook-ups. Yet, the number of such aberrant behavior is too small to overrule the author’s generalization.
In conclusion, though people’s behavior is indeed influenced by forces not of their own making, ultimately it boils down to one’s own conscience and personal decisions for which he/she bears accountability. However, the examples of free-will overwhelming external influences are few and far between. Hence, the author is fair to assert that external factors have a major contribution towards somebody’s social or personal behavior
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, likewise, look, similarly, so, therefore, third, while, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3133.0 2235.4752809 140% => OK
No of words: 576.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43923611111 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98709155012 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 322.0 215.323595506 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559027777778 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 972.0 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0905960325 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.037037037 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.37037037037 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24540802967 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060330141452 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856762522028 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151305602235 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945546169883 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 172.0 100.480337079 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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