Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of knowing about events that happen around the world. If I were to agree or disagree, I would definitely agree on the importance of being updated on what is going on in the world. It is my firm belief that even when some of those events do not affect as personally speaking, it is indeed information we can use nowadays in different ways, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, we live in a world hyper-connected. By this, I mean that we (thanks to media) are able to know whatever is happening in the most remote area on this planet. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, I currently live in Amsterdam, however, I do see the importance of knowing what it is happening in Africa, for instance. As a result, I have learned about many problems that many children struggle to get an education, but now as I know the problem, I started to donate to support a child's education. It may not affect my daily life to know this, but it did generate a thought on me, that make me aware of the inequalities in the world.
Secondly, knowledge is power. Every time I go out with my friends, we end up talking about a great variety of topics and I feel surprised to hear some of their stories or points of view on different matters. What it strikes me the most, however, is that some things I would have never thought about it before and it makes me feel very left out of the conversation, because I literally have no clue what to say about it. Moreover, I think it is interesting to know about different subjects and build opinions on everything, even if those topics are not your particular area of expertise; you may want to have an idea.
It is certainly clear to see why I find very important to stay updated to any event that is happening in the world, you may end up tomorrow having a conversation, even with a stranger and you better be a little bit prepared on what to say, instead of not having arguments on that matter. In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that even the most unusual things can have at one point in our lives an effect on us.
- in the reading passage In the United States medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms However there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about pa 83
- Pterosaurs 3
- Humpback whales 80
- The decline of frogs populations 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'thank'
Suggestion: thank
...yper-connected. By this, I mean that we thanks to media are able to know whatever is h...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ven with a stranger and you better be a little bit prepared on what to say, instead of not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, i mean, i think, talking about, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40287769784 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66950102118 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513189448441 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.5335082194 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.4 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24930299835 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786002915672 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529002680305 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15041956714 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525791341561 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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