The chart below gives information about sale of two kind of battery. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.-Syerapke- (rewrite)
Nowadays, battery is the main utensil as power supply for many electronic sources. Avicenne energy released the prediction about worldwide sale between disposable and rechargeable battery in the 13 years forward start at 2009. This data consist of general battery and does not include batteries for cars, laptops, tablets, and smartphones.
More clearly, in 2009 rechargeable battery was sold by 5 billion dollar and will continuing rise to 25 billion dollar in 2025. In every five year the increment prediction of this figures average by 5 billion dollars. However, according to the table we can see that the chart movement of rechargeable battery predict very sharp year by year.
Move onto disposable battery using. From 2009 measurement, the number of sale slightly decreased year by year. Start at 12 billion dollars, and it is continuing fall to fewer than 10 billion dollars in 2025. Interested to see that each of line will be meet in 2015 with about 10 billion dollars sale each.
Clearly, we can see that in the upcoming rechargeable battery using is preferable than disposable one.
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This data consist of general battery
This data consists of general battery
rechargeable battery was sold by 5 billion dollar and will continuing rise to 25 billion dollar
rechargeable battery was sold by 5 billion dollars and will be continuing rise to 25 billion dollars
In every five year the increment prediction of this figures average by 5 billion dollars.
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that the chart movement of rechargeable battery predict very sharp year by year.
that the chart movement of rechargeable battery predicts very sharp year by year.
that each of line will be meet in 2015
that each of line will meet in 2015
we can see that in the upcoming rechargeable battery using is preferable than disposable one.
we can see that in the upcoming years,rechargeable battery using is preferable than disposable ones.
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