The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter to the editor, the central plaza store owner has stated that the number of shoppers in the central plaza have been gradually alleviating with skateboarding becoming popular dramatically. The owner states this with evidence that the decrease in business is mainly due to increase in the number of skateboard users. Additionaly, there is dramatic increase in the litter and vandalism throughout the plaza and hence has concluded that skateboarding needs to be strictly prohibited in the plaza which will result in rise of business to it's previously high levels. Before this can be concluded, it is important to have a few questions answeres before this recommendation canbe considered.
Firstly,the letter prematurely assumes that the fall in business of shoppers in central plaza is solely due to skateboarders. The owner fails to consider that the loss of shoppers might also be due to new malls and stores coming up in the area. It might be for instance that these malls sell a larger veriety of goods at better quality than the old shops did. The customers might have stopped coming to the old shops due to lack of quality and better prices and hence led to and closure of their business. Additionaly , the goods that these shops sold in past might have become outdated and not in par with the current market requirement and customer needs. If either of the scenarios are true then the argument does not hold water.
Secondly, The letter also concludes that the skateboarders are responsible for all the litter and chaos in the plaza. It fails to assume that the litter could have also been caused by the different shop owners and various other people which inturn led to the drastic drop in the number of customers visiting the store due to lack of maintainance and hygene in plaza. The owner fails to give clear proof and evidence as to how a simple outdoor activity like skateboarding causes so much vandilism, ruccus and damage to the business of these shops. The possibility of a bad customer service also cannot be ignored. Maybe most of the shoppers in the central plaza are not open minded and their continuous refusal to negotiate and provide good service let to bitterness and fights in the plaza. Since the letter states. The argumentation and recommendation could have been justified if the owner threw more light on the actual causes of vandilism. Since it fails to doso, the argument is clearly flawed and ineffectual.
Hence, in conclusion, The argument does not hold merit due to it's reliance on several unwarrented assumptions. In order to evaluate the viability of the argument, the letter needs to be backed with more evidence against the skateboarders with elluciadive proofs.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2224 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.867 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.35 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.313 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , the
...commendation canbe considered. Firstly,the letter prematurely assumes that the fal...
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Line 2, column 518, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d closure of their business. Additionaly , the goods that these shops sold in past...
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Line 2, column 659, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... market requirement and customer needs. If either of the scenarios are true then ...
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Line 2, column 689, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er needs. If either of the scenarios are true then the argument does not hold wat...
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Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ue to lack of maintainance and hygene in plaza. The owner fails to give clear pro...
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Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sm, ruccus and damage to the business of these shops. The possibility of a bad cu...
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Line 3, column 793, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to bitterness and fights in the plaza. Since the letter states. The argumentation an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95833333333 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75067499167 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47149122807 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0928988165 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.05 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273803297083 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813518016031 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111772888681 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16219107201 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115045074403 0.0628817314937 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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