Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a bit of doubt, award has a specific place in children raising, which is most decisive factor in
future personality of kids. While some people believe that every single high mark from children
should attain a prize, another think it is not necessary or even harmful to their long-time behavior. In
my view, give prize for each high mark is not appropriate because of two reason.
To begin with, give money for each high score finally can affect children mental health and
motivation, it may have negative affect on child's intrinsic motivation, which determines whether an
action is eternal or provisional. Although, give money as a reward for every high grade establish
behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continue what is already available
internal motivation is needed. Imagine a child who give money after his every single high mark, and
his parents have to go a mission or travel, or due to some unknown reasons it is not possible to
encourage immediately their children by money or other things as rewards, and then guess what
happen? A child whose efforts for get high scores depends on prizes probably experience a big
decrease in grades and regress, which also lead to feel down, anxiety or other mental problems. We
can see its necessary to teach children to love what they do by their heart without dependency on
external reasoning such as money or any specific prize.
On the other hand, if children can not able to predict when they will achieve a commendation,
probably they will work harder, this is already a discussed fact in psychology literature,
unpredictable or periodic award better than to give it in a regular estate. Because it is not regular
and they don’t know the big prize when is coming in all tasks they try to be their best. For instance
when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exams
but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, on that year he gave me a single prize but
it made feel excited for all my scores and do my best. If the prizes are predictable may be its not
enough exciting to drive me for attain high grades on every task. It is better to give just single award
and employ a child mind with success every single moment.
Finally, I assume not only give money for every high score is not required, it is threat children mental
health as well, and regular prize because its nature predictably couldn’t provide enough excitement
that is keep child's mind with do his best every single moment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 34, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Line 8, column 28, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...e establish behavior that there is not exist from the beginning, in order to continu...
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Line 20, column 39, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... when I was a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on ...
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Line 20, column 50, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...s a primary school my father said me he decide to buy me a doll based on my final exam...
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Line 21, column 15, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[1]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'tell'?
Suggestion: tell
... based on my final exams but he didn’t say me I have to get how many high scores, ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 453.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7174392936 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4415809399 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507726269316 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 0.809619238477 865% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0470225194 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.642857143 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3571428571 20.7667163134 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.38176352705 616% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248261211851 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907359460665 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04261883268 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664507091461 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447768183431 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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