Some say that music plays an important role in society while others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Opinions are divided on whether music is only a way of entertaiment or whether it also plays a essential part in humanity. While i understand why some people support former view, i am still in favour of the latter.
Those who believe that it is by listening to music that people can use as a form of entertainment.From their point of view, the main function of music is to provide us to relaxed and plesant astmosphere. When people come home after long hard working a day and they need some entertaiment, they play music, which helps them refresh their mind and release the stress in study or at work. Another point is that many commercial company generate profit by entertaining customers. By way of illustration, the bars or pubs where peoples would be able to enjoy the kinds of music seem to grow rapidly and it mainly function on bringing excitements for customers.
Nevertheless, i still side with those who believe that playing a important part their life is music for several reason. Chief among these is that music are becoming a bridge connect people who have the same gout of music. They together are able to enjoy the rhythm of music which easily helps them to feel comfortable and reduce the pressure.As a result, they would not only build strong relationship but also eliminate the gap between different social classes.The second reason is that tune has a importance in health and medical area. Many doctors use music as a therapy to treat their patients who suffer from mental problems such as depression or autism.
In conclusion, despite acknowledging why people think that music is a good source of entertainment, i still hold the belief that the integral part of music other fields in life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83389830508 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7553004467 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586440677966 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.5006344733 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.636363636 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8181818182 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175062948839 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068308131828 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309425707566 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113080278638 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200115998092 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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