To begin with, as it is almost impossible to find people who does not own a computer, children nowadays are in the position to access the Internet and computer much easier than ever. Moreover, recent explosive technological advancement has world-widely provided a high-performing computer but relatively cheap prices that everyone can afford. This trend has led the gaming industry to develop a various range of games, from MMORPG to FPS, to match a variety of tastes of customers, especially children. Sports activities, by contrast, often require physical demand for children before they feel a sense of enjoyment or achievement so that children often choose to play video games.
In addition, a child's development can be beneficial by playing computer games. As games provide lots of goals but limited rewards, children are willing to join the competition and maximize their imaginations to find a way of winning, and it seems to me as desirable for brain development. On the other hand, this trend can do more harm than good for children's physical development. Kids often lack enough level of immunity to various diseases and physical ability to grow healthier adults as they are isolated by sitting at a desk without exposing themselves to the outside world.
In conclusion, although playing video games has become the most popular activity among children, and it has a good impact on their developments, we should not overlook the benefits of playing sports too
To begin with, as it is almost impossible to find people who does not own a computer, children nowadays are in the position to access the Internet and computer much easier than ever. Moreover, recent explosive technological advancement has world-widely provided a high-performing computer but relatively cheap prices that everyone can afford. This trend has led the gaming industry to develop a various range of games, from MMORPG to FPS, to match a variety of tastes of customers, especially children. Sports activities, by contrast, often require physical demand for children before they feel a sense of enjoyment or achievement so that children often choose to play video games.
In addition, a child's development can be beneficial by playing computer games. As games provide lots of goals but limited rewards, children are willing to join the competition and maximize their imaginations to find a way of winning, and it seems to me as desirable for brain development. On the other hand, this trend can do more harm than good for children's physical development. Kids often lack enough level of immunity to various diseases and physical ability to grow healthier adults as they are isolated by sitting at a desk without exposing themselves to the outside world.
In conclusion, although playing video games has become the most popular activity among children, and it has a good impact on their developments, we should not overlook the benefits of playing sports too
- You are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter say what the problem is describe the accommodati 73
- The amount of drinkable water for people is decreasing Why is this What can be done 52
- Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life Why do you think that is the case What is the most important thing to succeed in life 73
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- Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities Others however say this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required Discuss both these views and give your own o 84
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, moreover, so, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19327731092 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90025554735 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.3908009601 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.333333333 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4444444444 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.44444444444 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335149963504 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138260717233 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.213650647356 0.0667982634062 320% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196846946132 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.201035073364 0.056905535591 353% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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