Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerately.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, the number of senior citizens is living much longer after retirement. As a result, it has appeared an argument that the age that people retire from work at should be raised dramatically. However, I am of the opinion that the retirement age should not be modified because of several following factors.
To begin with, the elderly should worth having such a long time after retiring from work. To be more specific, the elderly had dedicated most of their life to contributing to the development of their workplaces, as well as their nation. Thus, they deserve a long time to enjoy life after retiring from work. Moreover, retired citizens are able to make some contribution to society. For example, Vietnamese elderly people’s organization often held fund-raising music festivals to provide disadvantaged and handicapped children in remote or mountainous areas with better lives by the money they gain from selling tickets.
Besides, job opportunities ought to be given to other promising generations. This means that the young who have lots of profound determination and prominent talents are more likely to devote their youth to developing themselves and bettering their countries while the elderly residents enjoy their after-retiring lifetime.
All in all, I disagree with the belief that there should be an increase in the retirement age due to the fact that not only can young generations have more choices of jobs, but the elderly people deserve a long time to unwind after working in a dedicate way for a lengthy period as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 244, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... a long time to unwind after working in a dedicate way for a lengthy period as well.
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cate way for a lengthy period as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1302.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87430910121 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615079365079 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.0254415876 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.363636364 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231334615899 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988272538462 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757110665762 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15136222211 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969431738095 0.056905535591 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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