Some people think that older school children should learn a wide range of subjects and develop knowledge. Others , however, think that they should only learn a small number of subjects in detail.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The advanced technology nowadays allows students a better chance to absorb new ideas , therefore , some people hold the view that students should take advantage of the new era and extend their learning. In comparison , there are still some people thinking narrowing down learning scope should be the right way for students to learn.
The former group reckons that a wide range of subjects would help students to know more about the world from different perspectives , which will definitely shape them to be more conclusive and open-minded. Subjects in various fields focus on different themes. Broadly speaking , liberal arts are more about literature, history , arts and so on while science deals with the knowledge about math , physics and astronomy. Some students who are limited to learn one field would be quite ignorant about the other . Therefore , they would judge things from their most familiar angle and not understandable about others. Learning from a wider field should help them to be more open-minded.
However, those who think students emphasis on small number of subjects in detailed way hold that this way allows students to drill on one field in depth and be proficient in that field. This saying also makes sense in the way that students spend their limited time on a few fields and practice more would surely take in more knowledge .This helps to shape them to be talented in one field.
Personally , I think children are not mature enough to know where their true passions are and where their true passions would lead them to. In the case , it is better for adults provide them with more choices by learning thing from a wider perspective instead of making their decision to focus on one field . By doing this ,children might make sensible decision for themselves .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, broadly speaking, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03378378378 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4820339771 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530405405405 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1896239381 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.615384615 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178395707815 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723237281126 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576040320875 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112118558484 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512566583166 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.