Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is inevitable that the main parts of any society is its youngers. They can prosper a country's economy by working hard, they can change a society's important decisions by protesting and having effects on politicians. They can enhance a country's scientific level by studying and researching, etc. But in this new modern era, many people and critics state that the youngers are less effective in social, economic and other subjects. However, some others do not have this view. This matter is a new controversial subject in society. I personally contend the former, and in the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite to be mentioned is that they involve in some issues, which had not existed before. One of the main younger's problems is economic issues. As most of families are not able to support their children in financial matters, youngers had to work more than their parents' did at their youth. For instance, Iran's revolution in 1979 caused by young people who did not have financial issues. They had appropriate career with high salary. So, their challenges were different from us. They wanted to establish a democratic government which could give them individual and social freedoms. But nowadays, we youngers just moving toward the money and our main challenge is earn money and increase our income. Nowadays, many people just only want to survive and they do not think about other issues, such as who is our society leader, the new rules which the parliament enacts, etc.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that young people are disappointed in making positive effects in society. This implication origins from the governments' limitations in younger's activities, specifically social and political activities. Maybe most of the youngers are active in some periods, but after a while, they prefer to left the society's activism and do some other affairs. For example, during the last presidential election in my country, me and my friends and most of the people in my age were going to election parties and advertised for a specific candidate. We tried to convince many people to vote to our favorite candidate. Although we succeeded in doing that, we got penitent due to the president's failure in keeping his promises. Most of us do not blame the president merely. But we are all now inactive people in political and society activities.
In conclusion, I think also we youngers have to make more effects on our society, we do not want to act as an effective person in society, or usually we can not.
- TOEFL T P O 4 Integrated Writing Task 3
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- TPO 33 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the families') or simply say ''most families''.
Suggestion: most of the families; most families
...oungers problems is economic issues. As most of families are not able to support their children ...
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Line 4, column 676, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'earned'.
Suggestion: earned
...ard the money and our main challenge is earn money and increase our income. Nowadays...
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Line 4, column 884, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... rules which the parliament enacts, etc. Another reason which deserves some words...
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Line 7, column 716, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'presidents'' or 'president's'?
Suggestion: presidents'; president's
... doing that, we got penitent due to the presidents failure in keeping his promises. Most o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71254209067 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533642691415 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7705693205 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.24 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130139638908 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359257286382 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305805163597 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762463876326 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291917893293 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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