IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample Answer Essay IELTS Cambridge 15: Tourists Visiting a Caribbean Island (IELTS Cambridge 15)
This report derives from the line graph which illustrates the number of tourists travelled in Caribbean Island according to their preference to stay on cruise ship and Island over seven years period from 2010 to 2017.
Broadly speaking, it is clearly seen that the number of visitors residing on the Island and cruise ships surged which leads to increase in the sum of travelers visited Caribbean Island throughout the period.
Notably, in the first year, the number tourists lived on the Isle was double than stayed on cruise ships which is 0.75 million, 0.25 million respectively that make total number of tourists exactly one million. In the following year, staying on cruise ship number surged by 50% whereas on Island remain unchanged. After two years, travelers preferred to stay on Island so that its number climbing up gradually and reached at highest level 1.5 million in 2013 while number of visitors staying on cruise ship declined by 0.25 million but sum of tourists increased by half million.
From 2013 the number of visitors staying on Island level off for next two years then dropped by 225k in 2016, in the last year it increased and keep previous level. While number residing on cruise ship surged dramatically throughout the time period. In mid of 2015 it surpassed the number of visitors staying on Island and peaked two million in 2017.Because of that increasement total number of tourists skyrocketed to 3.5 million at the end of this survey.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for next two years then dropped by 225k in 2016, in the last year it increased a...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r it increased and keep previous level. While number residing on cruise ship surged d...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...n Island and peaked two million in 2017.Because of that increasement total number of to...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n Island and peaked two million in 2017.Because of that increasement total number of to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, so, then, whereas, while, broadly speaking
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1224.0 965.302439024 127% => OK
No of words: 246.0 196.424390244 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9756097561 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4736031223 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483739837398 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 342.9 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2145086495 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.0 112.824112599 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.75 22.9334400587 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0685827250329 0.215688989381 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405090016666 0.103423049105 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279418874927 0.0843802449381 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609717932179 0.15604864568 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239877857125 0.0819641961636 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.2329268293 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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