Percentage of boys and girls aged 5 14 in Australia participating in various activities

Essay topics:

Percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 in Australia participating in various activities

The graph illustrates that the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 in Australia who take part in different activities ( skateboarding//rollerblading, cycling, watch TV,computer games and arts can craft)
According to the graph, there are almost 100 /% boys and girls choose watch TV while compare with watching tv this popular activity there are 80/% boys like play computer games and three-fifths of girls also enjoy this, but for art can craft activities girls take up nearly 50/% and these figures are twice as much as boys do.
As can be seen from the graph, there are some outdoor activities including skateboarding or rollerblading, boys represents 40/%whereas girls only account for below 25/%Cycling is another outdoor activity which 60/%of boys like to participate in meanwhile it is also enjoyable movement for girls and the number of this can reach to 40/%.
Overall, during these two week period for collecting data we find that some outdoor activities attract more boys’ attention than girls’.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , computer
...arding//rollerblading, cycling, watch TV,computer games and arts can craft) According to...
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Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to watch'
Suggestion: to watch
...are almost 100 /% boys and girls choose watch TV while compare with watching tv this ...
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Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... play computer games and three-fifths of girls also enjoy this, but for art can c...
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Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er of this can reach to 40/%. Overall, during these two week period for collect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 858.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2962962963 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24708574106 2.65546596893 122% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66049382716 0.547539520022 121% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 22.4926829268 240% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 162.082969151 43.030603864 377% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 286.0 112.824112599 253% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.0 22.9334400587 235% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.23603664747 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353122259585 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.212372311419 0.103423049105 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780654468248 0.0843802449381 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215429775847 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773371564504 0.0819641961636 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.5 13.2329268293 230% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 25.13 61.2550243902 41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 10.3012195122 225% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.35 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.4329268293 249% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.9970731707 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 11.0658536585 217% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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