Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that although Omega university's students has achieved higher grades since fifteen years ago, some employers see these grades' increase come as result of inflation. This argument is rife with holes and baseds on an unwarranted conclusion. Therefore, to make this argument more persuasive and holds water, the author of the argument should provide us with some evidence to be feasible to evaluate the argument.
First, the argument mentiones that potential employers looking at the rise in the Omega students' grades as inflation. However, this perspective could be true as it is from fifteen years ago which is so long ago, but this employers' conclusion based on unwarranted evidence. First, to evaluate such grades' increase if they result from inflation or not, the author of the argument should mention how many Omega University students had since fifteen years ago? and how many does it have now? The number of the students before and after will give the whole picture of the situation. For example, if they before were 100 students and now they 1000 students, undoubtedly, this students' number increase will affect the average as 30 percent of 100 not as 30 percent of 1000 . Therefore, if the situation as mentoined above, that means the conclusion which is drawn in the original argument doesn't hold water.
Second, it's not logic to comapare two different palces to each other as the potential employer do.teree are so many factors perhaps affect the results eThey say that Alpha University's students are successful in getting job, and to make Omega unversity achieve such successful the professors' evaluation should be terminated. This a naive conclusion, as it relies on uncomplete image of the situation. The author should give the reader what is the evidence for such conclusion? We don't know if the Alpha University has the proffessors' evaluation or not? Moreover, Alpha unviveristy perhaps has different approach in studying which is more effective,and thus, its graduates succeed in getting jobs. Therefore, if the potential main concern to give Omega University a good chance in getting jobes, they should look at different things. First, the srudying system if its effective and the number of the students compared to the previous and to what extent their evaluation is siginicant, if there is actual inflation or not. All the previous point are important to elaporate them before reaching such a concluion.
In cocluion, the argument as it stands above is remarkably flawed, as the author relies on unwarranted assumptions and evidence. Therefore, if the author provide us based on what evidence he reach his concluion, that will make the argument more persuasive.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2214 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.043 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.651 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.547 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.329 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 221, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employers'' or 'employer's'?
Suggestion: employers'; employer's
...ears ago which is so long ago, but this employers conclusion based on unwarranted evidenc...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 457, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...y students had since fifteen years ago? and how many does it have now? The number o...
^^^
Line 2, column 765, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...percent of 100 not as 30 percent of 1000 . Therefore, if the situation as mentoine...
^^
Line 2, column 882, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...which is drawn in the original argument doesnt hold water. Second, its not logic to c...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 9, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...al argument doesnt hold water. Second, its not logic to comapare two different pal...
^^^
Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...a unversity achieve such successful the professors evaluation should be terminated. This a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...is the evidence for such conclusion? We dont know if the Alpha University has the pr...
^^^^
Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...oach in studying which is more effective,and thus, its graduates succeed in getting ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'reaches'.
Suggestion: reaches
...or provide us based on what evidence he reach his concluion, that will make the argum...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19266055046 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74249777247 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470183486239 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2638538801 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225329026664 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648510551111 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756960497786 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121915085437 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733106585498 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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