The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in four different countries

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the different home activities among young children in four different countries.

The bar graph compares the percentage of various types of indoor curricular activities which are done by young children in four countries that are Malaysia, china, nigeria, and sudan. It is interesting to note that computer games is the most popular activity than others.

Overall, reading is not as much popular as computer games. However, book reading and watching television is considered as a better activity than reading.

In nigeria, most of the children play games on computer as about 60%, while half of this proportion utilised in watching television. Reading is the least popular activity with only 10%. However, board games carries double of it's percentage. similarly, In sudan computer games remains at top and watching television and reading has similar percentage (30%) and reading has also similar percentage as nigeria.

By contrast, the percentage of children playing computer games is as similar as in sudan (50%), whereas board games has half percentage. Meanwhile, watching television and reading has 5% more and less than percentage of the board games (25%) respectively.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (5 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Similarly
...games carries double of its percentage. similarly, In sudan computer games remains at top...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, similarly, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37209302326 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76636680311 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529069767442 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8889507735 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0973134747049 0.215688989381 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445362431562 0.103423049105 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647779312909 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752677126813 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784780846062 0.0819641961636 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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