TPO 13 independent writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Living in a lively family that has a lot of members is most of the western people’s fancy of Chinese family. However, in my opinion, the importance of the extended family is less important now than it was in the past.
First of all, lots of family members move to urban area nowadays to seek for jobs which the relationship of the extended family are faded. For example, my dad was growing in a big family that relatives were living closely in Hualien. The big family was formed since my great grandparents. After my dad graduated from the university, he decided to move to Taipei for a job position. Not only my dad, all the third generations of the family were moving out to different cities for their career. They only meet during festivals. This situation make me and my cousins are not familiar with each others which is so different to my father and his cousins’ relation. If it is no longer easy to support our family members since we are not staying close, the importance of the extended family can’t be seem as important as in the past.
Secondly, family members are easy to become financially independent nowadays, so they tend to pursuit their ideal lifestyle than living together. For example, in the past, it was not common for women to have their own job. As the result, they lived with their husband’s family even though the living habits were so different. For woman who were not married also used to live with their parents. However, since more and more woman are joining the work place, they would more likely to form a small family of themselves instead of bearing the different living habits. That is to say, the extended family are gradually becoming not acceptable when people are having other choices.
Admittedly, in Chinese culture, relatives that we have blood relation are always close to us. We are taught to respect to and take care of our extended family members no matter how far we are. Nevertheless, if I try to define how important the relatives are, I find out that I rather seek for help and share my thoughts to my friends than them.
In conclusion, the importance of extended family are diminishing due to living apart and being financially independent.
- TPO 43 integrated essay 70
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- TPO 36 independent writing 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, as for, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74545454545 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56360346826 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503896103896 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0179953738 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.35 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193288516543 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697389174693 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755422583855 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130135995357 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639295760085 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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