In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between inequality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in more egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits.
What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
Recently, a strong connection between equality and personal achievement has been believed to grow. In my opinion, an egalitarian society in which everyone has the same rights and opportunities should be encouraged so that people can achieve more success.
First of all, education equality is an essential factor in this kind of society as it has impact to personal success. All children in this world deserve to have access to free schooling, and higher education should be affordable for those who want to work and pursue a higher career. It is unfair if affordable higher education or free schooling is not accepted because it means that only children from wealthier families could have access to the best learning opportunities. As a result, not only country’s economy might be affected, especially in the job market but individuals who are in informative years also might be changed.
In addition, in my point of view, I think that equality does not mean that people are not allowed to fail or lose the motivation to succeed. Living in a fair society helps most of them to feel more motivated to work hard, eventually reach their full potential. On the contrary, an unfair society in which individuals are badly discriminated, regardless of their gender or social standing, would be more likely to demotivate people to achieve success since they acknowledge that the odds of success were stacked in favour of those having privileged backgrounds.
In conclusion, there seems a positive relationship between equality and personal achievement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17529880478 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93369422412 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593625498008 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.7171931605 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.9 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252273586808 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103041597657 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106435093422 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177006714238 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133433374948 0.056905535591 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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