It is suggested that primary children should learn how to grow vegetables and keep animals. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is appreciated that learning to grow vegetables and raise animals. While I personally concur that would be a positive development, it also has several drawbacks that are worth discussing.
On the one hand, grasping the knowledge of cultivating vegetables and keep animals would be advantageous to children in terms of developing life skills and good qualities, along with learning to put academic theory into practice. Initially, as growing veggies and raising animals are practical skills that require a great amount of time and dedication, children would have a sense of responsibility and patience. Additionally, vegetables and animals are sources of staple food, which means adopting the method of vegetables and animals caring would aid children with hands-on experience for self-sufficiency. Besides, these activities can help children attain the capability of applying theories to practical situations. This is derived from the fact that taking care of veggies and animals requires a wide range of knowledge from the school curriculum. For example, measuring and counting, which are mathematical concepts involved in gardening, is indispensable for children to complete their tasks such as estimating the needed distance between two rows of lettuce or counting how many cows there are in a livestock crush.
On the other hand, there are some minimal demerits that are outweighed by the benefits. To begin with, the process of growing vegetables and keeping animals would be time-consuming, thus children would not have enough time for revising the old lessons at school. Moreover, essential farm-specific pieces of equipment should be purchased as a part of teaching children these practical skills, which might become a financial burden on schools in remote and poor areas, especially in the mountainous regions. For these reasons of time consumption and lack of facilities, I believe that learning these skills can bring negligible adverse effects on children.
In conclusion, although learning to grow vegetables and keep animals have both advantages and disadvantages, my verdict is that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 6.8 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 19.0 5.60731707317 339% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 965.302439024 189% => OK
No of words: 327.0 196.424390244 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5749235474 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06774321818 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 106.607317073 179% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584097859327 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 283.868780488 197% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1131318608 43.030603864 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.230769231 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 5.23603664747 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305602276331 0.215688989381 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108589718073 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841266898846 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20008735195 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074398397758 0.0819641961636 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.2329268293 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 61.2550243902 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 11.4140731707 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.06136585366 121% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 40.7170731707 248% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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