Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The importance of education in the current modern world is inevitable, so parents come up with various means to persuade their kids to study more and become well-educated. However, some people believe that giving monetary rewards to children is not a logical idea, others believe otherwise and support this kind of gift. I concur with the latter group for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is indisputable that a compelling incentive has a crucial role in enhancing the performance of humans, and school-age children are not exempt from this fact. Giving money as a reward can be a great motivation for kids to do their best and promote their efficiency and consequently get more satisfying marks. Moreover, getting high marks leads to self-satisfaction feeling in children because they find themselves, successful persons and this positive feeling can act as an impetus for them to continue their progress. As a case in point, an in-depth study was conducted in the department of psychology of our university on two groups of school students to examine the effects of monetary prizes on their performance. As a result, experiments illustrated that the first group who got rewarded for their high marks at least had 30 percent better grades and reported more self-satisfaction feelings than the other group.
Furthermore, another equally remarkable point substantiating my viewpoint is that by giving money to kids, they get a chance to get to know some crucial concepts like financial and investment skills. Moreover, they will understand how hard earning money is and don’t waste it. No one can cast a shadow of suspicion on this notion that if individuals become familiar with money management, especially at lower ages, they will be less likely to encounter financial issues in the future and know how to manage their budget deal with living costs. Take a personal experience as an example; when I was in elementary school, my parents sometimes gave me some monetary bonuses. They also had been taught me some advantages of investment. So, I divided my budget into several parts and invested a part in a bank. After more than 15 years, I had a significant amount of money in my bank account which I used for starting my current business. Moreover, the economic tricks I have learned, have taught me how to save money despite all the costs of living.
By taking into account all the above reasons and so many others, I believe that giving money to young kids is a wise idea and has many benefits for them. That is because they will be motivated to study hard, and they also become familiar with the economic concepts and money management.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, at least, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96475770925 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82219710905 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54845814978 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6191769014 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.222222222 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271793480749 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765551259437 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396929295183 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151287191221 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052509938845 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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