People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over 99% percent of students from my high school attend university after they graduated. Attending college or university becomes a common thoughts that can make us competitive. In my opinion, people attending colleges with multiples reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, universities provide opportunities for students to generate ideas without thinking about failure. For example, when I was a second-year university student, I attended a business competition that students propose ideas of different business models. I was planning to sell smoothie with my classmates in our university. The professor helped us to think more comprehensively and suggested us to compare smoothie store on the market. At the end, our plan didn't work out but I tried and understand how to create logos, make products and set price. Those skills becomes helpful to me after I graduated.
Secondly, study in the universities can expand our network with people. At school, we can know people with different majors who can be helpful to offer us information from different field. For instance, I am an English major students, and I have a friend who is majored in mass communications. She told me that there is a TV company is hiring people with english speaking skills. Then, I applied for the job and worked there for 2 years. Besides, we can also meet people who can be our lifelong friend in college. College students are having more time and freedom than high school students. We have lots of time to spend with our classmates after the classes.
Admittedly, a lot of people may say that if we skip the four years of university, we can earn and save lots of money. I have heard some people claims that the knowledge they learn from college is not helpful to their future job. Yet, from my perspectives, university is not a cram school to teach us how to work, but to enrich us with knowledge that can influence our value system. To be specific, I read a lot of literature works in English department, and those works are hard to directly related to most of the career. Nevertheless, those works really change my perspectives on humanity and life.
To sum up, people attend college because it open for ideas and failure and it can expand our relation with people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thought'?
Suggestion: thought
... college or university becomes a common thoughts that can make us competitive. In my opi...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ore on the market. At the end, our plan didnt work out but I tried and understand how...
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Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...ke products and set price. Those skills becomes helpful to me after I graduated. Sec...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[5]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
... network with people. At school, we can know people with different majors who can be...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'student'?
Suggestion: student
...ld. For instance, I am an English major students, and I have a friend who is majored in ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...from my perspectives, university is not a cram school to teach us how to work, but to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88174807198 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79465071647 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532133676093 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1644853211 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.5652173913 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9130434783 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5652173913 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21961007745 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668464203271 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597187432986 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147912391198 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057851459755 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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