TPO 21 independent writing
There is no denial to the fact that a lot of companies will choose candidates by what university degrees they hold. Personally, though, I believe that a person who can relate well to people can be more success in a future job.
First of all, relate well to people makes us easier to reach help from colleagues and solve problems at work. My own experience demonstrates this concept. In my previous job, I was responsible for managing projects. I had to communicate with people from different departments, and luckily, I got alone great with my colleagues. Therefore, my colleagues would like to help me to adjust the products to meet clients' needs and to tell me the reasons why they can't finish on time. Because I had a direct communication with my working partners, I could prepare for the ongoing problems earlier and to do my job better.
Secondly, relate well to people also means to have a better relationship with our supervisors who have right to give us promotion. Supervisors or managers are the one who have little friends at work. If we can treat them well as the one we cared, we will be remembered by them. To take my friend as an example, he is a person who love to take care of other people's feeling. When he saw his supervisors worked overtime, he would asked them if they need any help initiatively. After a year, the supervisors raised his salaries because they believed he was a good team player.
Admittedly, it is a well-known fact that having solid knowledge is crucial for work. Studying hard in school can help us to improve our knowledge in certain professional field. Yet, from my perspectives, the knowledge that can apply to work is keep advancing because the technologies are keep evolving. To be specific, the knowledge we study from school can basically help us in a job in only five years. A good employees should always learn and equip themselves in every stage of a job to be competitive.
To sum up, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school for several reasons.
- TPO 45 independent writing 3
- TPO 15 independent writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at a young age 60
- TPO 34 independent writing Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phones online games and social networking Web sites 76
- TPO 21 independent writing 3
- TPO 43 integrated essay 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eds and to tell me the reasons why they cant finish on time. Because I had a direct ...
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Line 5, column 429, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
...s supervisors worked overtime, he would asked them if they need any help initiatively...
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Line 7, column 413, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'employee'?
Suggestion: employee
... us in a job in only five years. A good employees should always learn and equip themselve...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68698060942 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79041843341 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548476454294 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0185431231 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.6 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.05 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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