The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices are harmful to individuals and to the society they live in.
To what extent do you agree and disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is argued that some kinds of recreation, especially video games on handheld devices, have harmfully impacted both individuals who tend to use them and the community where they settle down. In my opinion, I totally agree with this idea, because I find many reasons why we could be victims caused by them.
There is no denying that the availability of entertainment, including video games, is able to cause damaging influences on people, especially the young. It is easy to find evidence that children intending to immerse themselves in the virtual world are willing to get worse than their peers who spend less time on it. Furthermore, there are many incidents and crimes regarding video games or other entertainment means. It is found in many press reports about the heart-broken stories that some adolescents intend to commit a crime when their family members attempt to prevent them from playing video games too much. Undoubtedly, the young who will become the builders for their society and nation seem to follow the wrong path when spending their time on means of this recreation.
Regardless of many strong arguments about benefits that residents could gain from them, I personally believe that their drawbacks obviously outweigh positive potentials. According to many researchers, playing video games could make the patients’ brains more flexible than the others who are hardly involved, whereas no one can prove how long this effectiveness could last, and whether the patients could be better due to video games or physical treatments. If some people find the availability of r relaxing and distressing, they can also realize the same benefits of other activities such as physical activities or mental games. Moreover, it seems difficult to control the time or gender of those entertainments that people intend to play. As a result, they are capable of becoming addicted or more violent if they spend too much time.
In conclusion, I completely agree that the availability of recreation and video games could bring many negative effects on the individual person and the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, whereas, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18289085546 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78396071396 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59587020649 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.1427097051 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.153846154 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158816632474 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593643456897 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365319775411 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108270136536 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169822819432 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.