Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (about 300-350 words)
It is thought that students who show the best academic results should be rewarded by schools. However, others believe that rewarding students who make progress is more essential. I believe that both of them should be rewarded for their excellent results and improvements in studying.
There are many reasons why schools give awards to pupils who have the excellent academic results. An obvious reason is that this is extremely helpful for students who are in poor family. They do not have enough money to pay the fees as well as to buy the stationary, so the awards for the best students is a good solution for them. Then they will try their best to gain these presents. For instance, my classmate who has grown in a low-income family always pays the fees by the scholars that she gains for her excellence. This help their parents relieve from the burden of paying for her education.
Another reason is that rewards for students who have the best academic results also encourage the others to study. Teenagers always want to attract others’ attention, so the most impressive way to do that is to become one of the most excellent students at their schools.
On the other hand, schools should reward to students who have the improvements in education. Firstly, this reduces the pressure of students whenever the exams are coming. This is because they face a lot of depression from studying and being compared with others. For example, the students who has the average academic results in my schools are always praised and rewarded for their improvements. Then they enjoy the progress of studying more than the feeling of failures. In addition, rewarding for students who make progress also help to decline the rate of students who have intention of dropping out schools. Thus they will have the feeling of being recognized by others and then try harder for their studying.
In conclusion, although some people think that schools had better give awards for students for their best academic result, there are more compelling reasons why it is important to reward students who make stride in studying.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2023-01-25 | Nguyen Ho Khanh Duy | 61 | view |
| 2022-12-14 | Ieltsbg | 56 | view |
| 2022-08-21 | yencmvbhp27@gmail.com | 92 | view |
| 2022-07-29 | ulzzang | view | |
| 2022-07-29 | ulzzang | view |
- Write an essay of about 350 words on the following topic Covid 19 epidemic has caused many serious social affects however It has helped us understand more about the values in our lives What is your opinion To what extent do you agree or disagree with this 52
- Write an essay of about 350 words on the following topic Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences so this kind of information should be restricted on the media Do you agree or disagree with this state 61
- Some people want to meet each other in person to communicate while others want to telephone instead of face to face communication Which of these communication methods do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion 67
- Some sociologists say that it is a waste of time for students to pursue secondary education for 12 years It is better to shorten it to nine years only then go to vocational school to learn a skill applied in their jobs or go to university to get a degree 73
- Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements Discuss both views and give your own opinion Discuss both these views and give 56
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t excellent students at their schools. On the other hand, schools should reward...
^^^
Line 6, column 613, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...have intention of dropping out schools. Thus they will have the feeling of being rec...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96327683616 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51471617485 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454802259887 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0136292806 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4736842105 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346147425474 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135664557756 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115498535654 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252008445153 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108828065771 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t excellent students at their schools. On the other hand, schools should reward...
^^^
Line 6, column 613, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...have intention of dropping out schools. Thus they will have the feeling of being rec...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96327683616 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51471617485 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454802259887 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0136292806 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4736842105 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346147425474 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135664557756 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115498535654 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252008445153 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108828065771 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.