Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Although some people accede with the belief that people are cautious about their expenditure on clothes, I personally argue that individuals tend to spend good amount of money on buying clothes to enhance their appearance for few reasons. I will substantiate my position on the subsequent paragraphs.
The foremost reason why I am in support with this argument is: the growing peer to peer competition with the rise in acitivity has influenced the peoples, specifically youths, to change their dress frequently. For the supporting example one need no look further that my brothers current life. My brother, at his teen age, currently studying in the high-school level, is highly influenced by his friends dressing codes. As a result, he constantly put a demand forward infront of my parents or towards me to buy newly fashionable clothes. The main reason for this is: he has a strong temptation to flaunt his new cloth infront of his friends. Consequently, the parents have to shop new clothes for him in lesser time gap which admittedly increases the expenditure.
Another subtle reason that strengthens my position is that different programs requires different dress codes which mandates the people to invest money on different types of clothes. The evident example can be seen in my 15-day schedule back a month. In those 15-days, I participated in four major programs-- presentation on my research, marriage ceremony of my friend, funeral of friends father, and friends get-together. For the each of these programs, I had to wear different dresses. To illustrate, I wore formal clothing (shirt, pants, tie, and coat) for presentation, typical Nepali dress (called as "Daura Surwal"), for marriage ceremony, simple plain dress for funeral, and finally casual wears for friends party. Had there been a single dress facility, I would not have spend so much on the shopping of cloths.
The influence due to individuals role models is another reason that substantiates my position. The flim industry, nowadays, has been a fashion hub with each movies have diverse designs of clothings for every individuals who are part of it. Further, the normal people who idolize such actors or actresses are highly motivate to copy their dressing study. Consequently, they will shell out the capital to buy such clothings. For instance, my cousin, a 8-year-old boy, idolize Mr. Hrithik Roshan, a popular actor in bollywood movies. When his superhero movies title as Krish released, his urge to buy the extraoridnarily designed superhero dress got over his head. Further, Mr. Hrithik was seen in different avatar with simple casual clothes in another movie; but my cousin was enticed my his looks, specially dress, so he demanded to buy him that also. Thus, the idol impact on the people has a great role to spend money in purchasing clothes.
Taking into account of all the above-mention reasons, I strongly affirm that the people spend additional sum of money in buying clothes due to peer to peer competition, program requirements, and influence of their idols.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: teenage
...others current life. My brother, at his teen age, currently studying in the high-school ...
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Line 5, column 785, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...single dress facility, I would not have spend so much on the shopping of cloths. T...
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Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'motivated'.
Suggestion: motivated
...ize such actors or actresses are highly motivate to copy their dressing study. Consequen...
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Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...uch clothings. For instance, my cousin, a 8-year-old boy, idolize Mr. Hrithik Ros...
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Line 7, column 846, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...y dress, so he demanded to buy him that also. Thus, the idol impact on the people ha...
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Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to peer'.
Suggestion: to peer
...onal sum of money in buying clothes due to peer to peer competition, program requirements, and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, if, look, so, then, thus, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2571.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17303822938 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86241896727 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557344064386 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4440060528 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.782608696 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6086956522 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69565217391 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114185508143 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355705903286 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369621936917 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779807394105 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254455896734 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.