Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
In today's modern world, with the development of the technology people tend to use social media and deferent platforms for being touch with others. Some people prefer to keep a record of their pictures and other information of their daily life in the social media. However, others disagree with this idea. From my point of view keeping our pictures and videos on our social account is a great idea. I feel this way because of two main reasons which i will express in the following essay.
First of all, most of the photos and videos that uploaded in the social media account are about people daily and current life, and they can be great memory in the future. They can take memorable pictures from different places they go for vacation or record a great video from their new born baby or from their wedding. After while, when they check their account, they feel great about that memories. Moreover, when people uploaded these pictures in their social media account they can keep it for long time without difficulty. For instance, taking picture is one of my hobbies and most of the time when I go to special places such as trip or party; I take picture from these memorable times and share it in my Instagram. 4 years ago I went to hiking trip with my family to Isfahan, one of our countries historical city, I took lots of pictures from various historical places such as mosques, museums, palace,... and I had share it in my instagram account and in pandemic period I watch them again and it was amazing.
Secondly, having social media accounts and being active at their increases the chance of having communication with lots of new people and making new friendships. Also, they can be in touch with their old friends and follow their daily life in the social media. In nowadays' modern life, most of the individuals feel lonely and depress with having social media account and sharing a photo or video others could express their opinions about their photos and it is a great way to making new relationships even from long distances. For example, with creating the social media account and sharing my photos at there I find lots of new good friends and I speak with them sometimes when I do not feel great and one of them, who live in other country, nowadays is one of my good friends.
To sum up, from my vantage point, uploading our photos and videos in the social media is a great idea because of two main reasons. First, people can keep their photos for long time and having a memorable album. Second, social media give them an opportunity to make new friendships and relationships.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Suggestion: , .
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'shared'.
Suggestion: shared
... mosques, museums, palace,... and I had share it in my instagram account and in pande...
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Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'shared'.
Suggestion: shared
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Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: Nowadays
...w their daily life in the social media. In nowadays modern life, most of the individuals fe...
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Suggestion:
...make new friendships and relationships.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64488017429 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36039125558 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424836601307 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6563993657 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.210526316 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214975441087 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860507777296 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103663493276 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154844583056 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764667999214 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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