Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In today's modern world, most parents do not have enough time to spend with their children, so they need to have an enjoyable and memorable time with their children. Some people believe the busy parents should spend this time on fun activities such as playing games or sports, but others believe it is best to do things together related to schoolwork. From my point of view, parents should spend this precious time doing something fun and make good memories for their children. I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First, playing games with young children in their free time will help them relax and be happy. Also, it improves the family relationship between parents and children. When parents spend their free time doing activities what their children want, it makes them joyful and reduces their anxiety. For example, my brother likes playing chess after his exams and school, and in his free time, he always wants my father to play with him, or he likes riding a bike with my dad, and he says this way decreases his stress and tiredness.
Second, today education is so essential for everyone and the children spend lots of their time studying and doing their schoolwork so they need have break time for themselves and spend it like what they want and if they wish to play or do sports parents should not push them to study and do schoolwork. Moreover, playing games or doing sports will be helpful for children to have a healthy body and brain. It helps them be more active and do not have any overweight also; they will be mentally healthy. They will be charged for their next days, so having a healthy body and brain for children is essential, even crucial than studying because the world needs happy children who play, dance, and laugh loudly, not sad, depressed ones.
In conclusion, from my vantage point, parents should spend their free time playing a game with their children instead of doing things related to their schools, because of two main reasons. First, it makes them happy and relaxes and improves their relationship. Second, it helps them to be healthy and fit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81369863014 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29805044366 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482191780822 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1922125686 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.133333333 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452994219635 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169606606491 0.076458572812 222% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141707791647 0.0737576698707 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307542707013 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136929231352 0.0645574589148 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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