The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk and dairy products for commercial sale Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below shows the production and processing of milk and dairy products for commercial sale.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process by which milk and other dairy products are produced.
It can be seen that the process consists of seven to eight main stages, commencing with taking fresh milk from the cows and ending with the packaging stage for sale.
At the beginning of the process, the cows are grazed on large glass in order to have the best condition beforing the milking stage. And then the fresh milk will be collected by a milking machine twice a day before being stored in refrigerators. After that, a milk tanker will be used to transport fresh milk to the Dairy on a daily basis.
In the Dairy, many stages are involved to manufacture different milk products including fresh milk, cheese, cream, and butter. The milk will be pasteurized, this is an important stage to ensure the quality of the final products before the packaging stage. Finally, milk and dairy products are ready to be on sale in supermarkets and shops.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...m elders how to understand one another. If they are more siblings you will know th...
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... parents have to earn more money to feed a big group and also to have a good life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81993569132 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62827624455 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572347266881 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1418734752 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6875 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194854525164 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574569426663 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422892997151 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116386398282 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172434809933 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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