The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
According to the writing appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing, to reduce the number of on-the job accidents and to increase the productivity of the workers, work shifts should be shorten. The vice president came into this conclusions based on the experts saying that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are the contributing factors for on-the-job accidents. Another reason for this conclusion is that the thirty percent more accidents in Quiot Manufacturing than Panoply Industries plant. However, before this suggestion can be evaluated accurately the following two questions need to be answered.
Firstly, is it justified to compare the Quiot manufacturing and the Panoply Industries plant? Panoply Industries Plant has one hour shorter working hour than Quiot Manufacturing, may be because they had more worker to distribute the work. It may possible that both the factory does not produce same element and both doesn't need same amount of time. It can be possible that the proportion of work in the Panoply Industries plant is lower than the Quiot Manufacturing. Perhaps, the instuments or the machine used by both the company are not the same. It can also be possible that the production rate also varies. For example, if the Panoply Industries Plant is a bankrupted plant then the company will have no contract to fill up. If any of these scenarios are true, then how reducing working time will increase the productivity of the workers?
Secondly, is the experts saying is applicabe for the Quiot Manufacturing? There is a possiblity that the experts are saying right but for a specifc type of work. The experts may come into this conclusion that fatigue and less sleep are the contributing factors for on-the-jobs accidents based on a few comapny. It can be possible that their survey doesn't include any Quiot Manufacturing. For example, the workers of the Quiot manufacturing had enough sleep time and they don't have to do any repetitive job. May be there is an opportunity to show their creativity rather than doing same job for long time. It also can be possible that the worker have enough time to sleep. So, the working hour reduction might not be helpful to make the workers more productive.
Thirdly, is there a possibility that the machine that used by Quiot Manufacturing is not that well-known to the worker? May be the macine are very new to the worker and they are still learning how to use it. For example, if the machine are very intricate and tough to use, then they might fail and lost their life because of their poor knowledge how to protect them from the danger. Perhaps, there is not enough experts to help the workers to learn the working principles of the machines. If these scenarios are true then increasing working shift won't help to reduce the on-the-job accidents.
Finally, the suggestion of shifting working hour for increasing productivity and for decreasing the rate of accidents is based on some unwanted assumptions. This suggestion can be evaluated accurately if the author can provide some data in the form of a graph or chart. Any survey data may also be helpful to evaluate the suggestion.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortened'?
Suggestion: shortened
...y of the workers, work shifts should be shorten. The vice president came into this conc...
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Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e shorten. The vice president came into this conclusions based on the experts saying...
^^^^
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worker' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worker
... Manufacturing, may be because they had more worker to distribute the work. It may possible...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... does not produce same element and both doesnt need same amount of time. It can be pos...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y. It can be possible that their survey doesnt include any Quiot Manufacturing. For ex...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...acturing had enough sleep time and they dont have to do any repetitive job. May be t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... not that well-known to the worker? May be the macine are very new to the worker a...
^^
Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the working principles of the machines. If these scenarios are true then increasin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98116760829 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80874626455 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401129943503 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.9 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1801050303 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4642857143 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9642857143 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280209516528 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089028416157 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102215049231 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16870121816 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996311240345 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortened'?
Suggestion: shortened
...y of the workers, work shifts should be shorten. The vice president came into this conc...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 245, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e shorten. The vice president came into this conclusions based on the experts saying...
^^^^
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worker' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worker
... Manufacturing, may be because they had more worker to distribute the work. It may possible...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... does not produce same element and both doesnt need same amount of time. It can be pos...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y. It can be possible that their survey doesnt include any Quiot Manufacturing. For ex...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...acturing had enough sleep time and they dont have to do any repetitive job. May be t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... not that well-known to the worker? May be the macine are very new to the worker a...
^^
Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the working principles of the machines. If these scenarios are true then increasin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2645.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98116760829 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80874626455 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401129943503 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.9 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1801050303 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4642857143 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9642857143 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280209516528 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089028416157 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102215049231 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16870121816 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996311240345 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.