Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students can get as many benefits from organization or club activities as they can get from their academic studies.
An issue which was always controversial between all generations is high school’s and university’s programs and curriculum. Some people would say that is activities should be limited to academic studies although I feel that being an active member of a club, student society, organization or etc. can be as beneficial as academical activities. There are several reasons why I feel this way, which I will explain two of them in the following essay.
First of all, participating in student clubs and groups can bring self confidence and socializing skills, which is helpful for student’s career life in future. It’s obvious that you should have sufficient knowledge and enough academical background in a special field to fulfill a job, but it’s not everything. To become successful in that career and even be able keep that, you should have been achieved some socializing skills to use them in your behavior in that environment. As a personal experience, about a year ago, me and my friend decided to start a super market separately. We both had sufficient knowledge in marketing, but he was a socialized person and therefore he was really kind and friendly with his customers. During the year he have achieved more money than me. So, I looked into his marketing and I found the reason of his success in his special behavior to his costumers, which he had gained in being an active member of a student society in university.
Secondly, there are so many students from different cultures involved in these activities, which can help us increase our friend circle. When a student becomes a part of these organizations, he or she will increase his contact to so many other students who are from different ages, cultures, field of studies or etc. and as the time pass, this connection will become more friendlier and even can lead that group to become best friends. For myself, now, all of my best friends were members of our student publication which I was a member five years ago in university.
In conclusion, as my personal experience shows, I strongly feel students will gain as many benefits from student clubs as the can achieve from academic studies. This is because participation of these groups will bring behavioral skills and will increase number of friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ch is helpful for student’s career life in future. It’s obvious that you should have suff...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
... with his customers. During the year he have achieved more money than me. So, I look...
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Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'friendlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: friendlier
... time pass, this connection will become more friendlier and even can lead that group to become ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97900262467 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85857740622 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53280839895 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8321738815 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.588235294 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216166238499 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720496914026 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810048726739 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147488676369 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462211340829 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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