Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why?
In the modern world, social media has become a platform for people to share their ideas, feelings, and experiences. For me, I prefer not to create records on the social media because of the following reasons.
First of all, people who I don’t notice may fully realize my routine and my family details. They may do harm to my family members if they intend to do it. For instance, there was a famous pop singer who were fond of posting everything on her Instagram. She had posted the exterior and interior of her house, and the cars which she and her daughter usually took. She had told what private school her daughter went into. She also posted a family photo taken on her father’s birthday. In this way, people who kept in touch of her really realized her that one day her daughter was kidnapped while walking from the campus to her car. Although she eventually took her daughter back without any harm, her daughter was so shocked that she could fall asleep at night alone for a year. As a result, we know that it is improper to disclose private things to the public.
Secondly, as a changeable person, I always feel regretful about what I have done. If I
have post something that I don’t want people to know, there’s nothing I can do to compensate since people have already take a snapshot. Take me as an example; there was a time that I wanted to release my pressure so I post my failed math test paper on the Facebook. Also, I wrote how hard I have studied for this test. Furthermore, I complained about how bad the questions were given. Three days later, I regretted because my friends would all know my poor grade, looked down on me, and, more worse, humiliated me. I the post right away but some of my friends had read it, took a snapshot, and transferred to other students. When I met my classmates, I could feel that all of them despised me which made me pretty uncomfortable. As a consequence, I learn a lesson and stop using the online social media.
In conclusion, I prefer not to create records on the social media. This is because I may put my family members in danger and make myself depressed by letting others know my scandals.
- Integrated Writing TPO 67 70
- TPO 58 86
- TPO 67 80
- Which of the following ways can help children behave better limiting types of television programs and movies spend more time talking with children supervising and monitoring 70
- Which of the following ways can help children behave better limiting types of television programs and movies spend more time talking with children supervising and monitoring 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... private school her daughter went into. She also posted a family photo taken on her...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l regretful about what I have done. If I have post something that I don’t want pe...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 120, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...to compensate since people have already take a snapshot. Take me as an example; ther...
^^^^
Line 6, column 489, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
... my poor grade, looked down on me, and, more worse, humiliated me. I the post right away b...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50636132316 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47938753724 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557251908397 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7381131194 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8636363636 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22727272727 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127472343762 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451056170293 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693369371545 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924843125742 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749753980864 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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