The chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart reveals the proportion of males and females in Australia who participated in regular exercise division by age in 2010. At first glance, the men aged 15 to 24 and women aged 45 to 54 took the most part in physical activities. Conversely, men between the ages of 35 and 44 and the 65-plus women age group seemed to be less involved in exercise.

As can be seen, in the age groups 15 to 24, about 53% of men did regular exercise compared to approximately half of women. This was the age at which most men exercise. By contrast, the age group over 65 was when both males and females were less likely to participate in physical exercise; in addition, the proportion of both genders was under half.

In comparison, there were three age groups in which women joined in physical exercise more than men. While nearly half of women took part in regular exercise, the percentage of men was considerably lower ( around 42% ). With regard to the 35 to 44 age group, the proportion of females participating in physical exercise far exceeds that of males (approximately 53% and 40% respectively ). Similarly, the ratio of women was more than half as opposed to just over 45% of men.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, similarly, so, while, in addition, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 971.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62380952381 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70448433034 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 309.6 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7020435398 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.23603664747 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246562157922 0.215688989381 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11812527923 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460764607782 0.0843802449381 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191724893636 0.15604864568 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317597649505 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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