College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The choice of one’s college major is not a trivial one. In fact, it is not uncommon for entering students to ruminate on this decision for months, perhaps years, and then, once a decision has been made, immediately begin to second guess it. The prompt recommends that students should not belabor this point too long and simply choose a path that conforms most closely to their interests and skills. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that students look inward rather than outward when choosing college courses for two reasons.
To begin, the job market is ever shifting, and one decade’s ‘hot’ job is another decade’s dying one. Thus, to choose one’s profession based solely on the availability of work is to take a short-term perspective, one that will likely backfire. For instance, in the 1950s through the 1980s, nuclear engineering was a rapidly growing field as many of the most powerful nations on Earth were not only designing and manufacturing nuclear weapons, but hundreds of nuclear power plants as well. Consequently, nuclear engineering graduates were able to find high-paying work almost immediately upon graduation. However, because of issues related to NIMBY (Not In My Backyard) and recent nuclear accidents like the well-publicized Fukushima disaster, many countries are moving away from nuclear power in favor of other green technologies. Students who chose nuclear engineering in the 1970s because of the ‘abundant’ job prospects were certainly facing a different job market in the 1990s - and this market has only worsened through the 2000s. The above example illustrates that the job market is highly contingent upon unpredictable factors and that, if one assumes it is static, he or she is likely to get burned at some point in the future. It seems absurd to think of now during the current technological boom, but will the software engineering industry still possess dizzying job prospects in the future? History tells us that it will not.
Further, even if we assume that the job market is not dynamic, that is as unchanging as gravity, one should still pursue his or her interests because our happiness level plays a crucial role in how effectively we work. For instance, if a student who is passionate about horse training ‘pragmatically’ chooses the path of computer programming because of the plethora of lucrative job opportunities, she runs the risk of finding herself in a field she abhors and a job she finds no satisfaction in. She might go to work each day, sit at her desk, and stare at their computer screen with horse wallpaper, wondering what could have been and the career path she could have chosen. She might complete her programming tasks haphazardly and submit subpar work. Research has consistently demonstrated that, perhaps above all other factors, happiness has the most direct effect on work efficiency. In other words, workers who find personal satisfaction in their craft not only work faster, but produce higher quality products and services as well. Thus, on a micro scale, governments should encourage their populations to pursue their passions because, long-term, doing so leads to a more smoothly functioning economy not bogged down by worker discontentment. One needs to only look at government regimes from the past that forced many of their citizens to work on farms for the ‘collective good’. The vast majority of these workers had no interest in being on the farm, and agricultural output plummeted as a result. This phenomenon can infect an entire economy if people choose fields of study based solely on the promise of work and income.
Of course, some argue that in our increasingly globalized economy competition for jobs has skyrocketed and thus it is imperative that we pursue practical paths. However, isn’t that precisely why we should follow our interests? If we do so, we’re likely to do the best job possible. We’re likely to compete at the highest level. We’re likely to carve out a niche for ourselves in this ‘increasingly’ globalized world’. People who ignore their inner voices do so at their own peril.
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- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and sup 66
- Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take 83
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and sup 66
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, second, so, still, then, thus, well, for instance, in fact, of course, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3478.0 2235.4752809 156% => OK
No of words: 677.0 442.535393258 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13737075332 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10090420048 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8821296882 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 359.0 215.323595506 167% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530280649926 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 1052.1 704.065955056 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.105313709 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.931034483 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3448275862 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20689655172 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135986249344 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355555950121 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347299337134 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868257383009 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345975017151 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 167.0 100.480337079 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.