You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban rural and town between 1995 and 2010 Summarise the informat

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The given bar chart illustrates how many proportions of people who born in and worldwide of Australia living in three differents area from1995 to 2010.

What stands out from the given bar chart is that while the figure of citilizations was upsurge in both two types of people, both remainings bar had the downward trend. Furthermore, most of people choosed live in cities in both two years.

Started from 1995, people living in cities were highest in both types of people with 60% and roughly 50%, respectively. Ranked second was rural areas, at 40% on outside and around 30% on people who born in Australia. In contrast, people born outside witnessed lower than that of born in Australia with about 10 percents and 20 percents, respectively.

In term of 2010, while the figure of people living in cities experienced an soar to 80 percents for outside and more than 65 percents for inland, remaining areas were tumble. The figure for people born inland in both two areas remain were roughly 25 percents. Similarly, people born outside also seen an plunge to no more than 10 percents, at both areas.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ar had the downward trend. Furthermore, most of people choosed live in cities in both two year...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... of people living in cities experienced an soar to 80 percents for outside and mor...
^^
Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tumbled'.
Suggestion: tumbled
...rcents for inland, remaining areas were tumble. The figure for people born inland in b...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...imilarly, people born outside also seen an plunge to no more than 10 percents, at ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, second, similarly, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 919.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86243386243 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53896594829 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529100529101 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5895670661 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.111111111 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290414995638 0.215688989381 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136151028904 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714786441263 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187815919363 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938904547064 0.0819641961636 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ar had the downward trend. Furthermore, most of people choosed live in cities in both two year...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... of people living in cities experienced an soar to 80 percents for outside and mor...
^^
Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tumbled'.
Suggestion: tumbled
...rcents for inland, remaining areas were tumble. The figure for people born inland in b...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...imilarly, people born outside also seen an plunge to no more than 10 percents, at ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, second, similarly, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 919.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86243386243 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53896594829 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529100529101 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5895670661 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.111111111 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290414995638 0.215688989381 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136151028904 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714786441263 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187815919363 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938904547064 0.0819641961636 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.