Some people think that in modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals opine that the more society modernizes, the more people rely on each other, while others are not in consummate accord with the aforementioned idea. This essay would delve into discussing the two perspectives, as well as stating my support for the former one.
There are two main justifications why individuals are becoming more independent instead of dependent on others. Firstly, independence is one of the key factors to get success. Steve Jobs, for instance, is an independent person, always overcoming life's challenges, not relying on the money and position of his parents, finally became the extremely famous boss of Apple. Secondly, technology is becoming more prevalent than ever, so people can easily get access to the Internet. When facing a problem, individuals can search the Internet for numerous solutions. Therefore, individuals do not need to rely on others to solve their personal issues.
On the other hand, others believe that individuals tend to be more dependent on each other. To begin with, people have to face many challenges in the modern world; therefore, they have to depend on each other. For example, young individuals have to be dependent on their parents when they are unemployed or out of budget. In addition, being dependent on others makes individuals’ life become easier, they can easily solve all the problems they have to face. Instead of addressing difficulties by themselves, having other partners to share and tackle these issues together can be better.
In conclusion, it is not denied that independence is one of the beneficial habits that individuals should have. However, I believe that in the modern world, to face with social challenges, the solidarity is the most necessary
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
... that individuals should have. However, I believe that in the modern world, to fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24372759857 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91714879101 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584229390681 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0450568619 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412918296244 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135537058476 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11289331423 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232064486335 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821039130811 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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