Some experts suppose that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely believed that becoming wealthier is not intertwined with higher levels of contentment. From my perspective, I totally agree with this statement for the following reasons.
One compelling reason to support this argument may stem from individuals’ concerns about health issues. Specifically, the rapid pace of globalization has led to the transmission of numerous unknown diseases, which may pose severe threats to human health. For instance, the pandemic of COVID-19 was perceived to originate from Wuhan city, China, which subsequently infected millions of global citizens due to global travel. During this pandemic, most individuals worldwide laid substantial emphasis on their survival over financial status, which significantly reduced their happiness. Consequently, it is inevitable that wealth may not translate into satisfaction when considering health issues.
Another reason for the gap between additional wealth and happiness is a lack of entertainment. Admittedly, if people are passionate about enhancing their wealth, they have to make considerable efforts to achieve their goal. Obviously, the desire to become richer may squander much of people’s time, which prevents them from relaxation. Thus, inadequate resting time may result in prolonged stress and depression, which may reduce people’s happiness. For example, many Hanoians residing in affluent areas have reported experiencing mental health issues due to a lack of social gatherings and family reunions.
In conclusion, while some argue that being richer may stimulate the brain to produce dopamine to increase happiness, I disagree with this viewpoint. This is because additional richness may minimize time for entertaining activities, potentially exacerbating mental health issues. Consequently, these individuals may face considerable uncertainties regarding their health, leading to a decline in pleasure and contentment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01459854015 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16800934863 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664233576642 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.402886975 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.866666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0709289958615 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260124694995 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309812014931 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0437171275753 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203937257497 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.58 12.4159519038 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.7 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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