You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In many countries today the retirement age from work has been raised. Do the advantages of raising the retirement age outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
The debated topic that many nations in the world increase the age of retirement in the working labour. This essay will delve the pross and cons of this issues and state whether the advantages outweigh itts disadvantages or not.
On the one hand, the older the labors force is, the better it is for our economy. This can be explained by the following reasons. First of all, when the working people spend a long time at work, they can get more experience and have deeper knowledge in their fields, which befenits a lot to the company they work for such as minimizing the mistakes, do the job more efficiently and gain much money for their owners. Moreover, the government needn't to pay for the pension, besides, they can use these money to boost other fields such as education, healthcare and infrastructure, which helps to develop the country.
On the other hand, there are several drawbacks when raising the retirement ages. First, It is the unemployment rates that should be concerned. As more old people are still at work, the job opportunities for the youth is fewer and fewer. As a result, many young people who are out of work may find their way to find a job abroad or easily end up in illegal activites. In addtion, it is clear that the younger the labor force is, the more enery they have. Furthermore, the younger they are, the better they adapt with the changes in technolofy, all of which leads to the improvement in the outcome products, later develop the country's economy.
In conclusion, all things considered I am pf the opinion that goverment shouldn't raise the retirement age and should spend these chance for the younger generation so that the country can keep up with the rapid change in the cutting - edge technolody in the current trends. This help the country more and more powerful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
Suggestion: this money; these moneys; these monies
... for the pension, besides, they can use these money to boost other fields such as education...
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
.... In conclusion, all things considered I am pf the opinion that goverment should...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, may, moreover, so, still, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72151898734 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54801340253 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556962025316 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.4795890778 49.4020404114 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.571428571 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207322757146 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682984837682 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567230837958 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142097487323 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557179023746 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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