After the industrial revolution, the environment has gone through greatly detrimental changes. The rapid growth of industrialization and the rise of the mechanized factory system have led to improvement of every aspect of people’s lifestyles around the world. Personally, I believe that raising the standards of living unavoidably leads to environmental deterioration.
To begin with, mass production of diverse items and providing wide range of facilities give rise to depletion of natural sources such as water, soil, heavy metals and so on. Also deforestation in order to expand farmlands can in turn contribute to extinction of the indigenous living species. Besides, climate change arising from emissions of cars and factories is another major problem that threatens biodiversity on earth. Increasingly, air and water are being contaminated due to pollutant particles produced by industrial activities.
Equally important, the improvements in the living standards itself has brought about dramatic changes in values and principles people have gotten used to through recent century. As people tend to be more voracious in acquisition of goods and possessions compared to the past. What is more, most of the people evaluate themselves merely by their materialistic achievements and accomplishments. To put it all together, the higher living standards result in more materialism and consumerism that in turn making people more eager to improve their lifestyles. This vicious circle is going to last constantly. Consequently, we are going to face more and more exploiting and polluting natural sources leading to environmental degradation.
To put it in a nutshell, according to what mentioned above, we can't have our cake and eat it too. So I think strongly that deterioration of the environment cannot be evaded in today’s ever-increasing the standards of living improvement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, so, i think, such as, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66666666667 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38485392191 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3015386762 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0861048367819 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0266612569326 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343750388248 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0531301305723 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323306771933 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.