describe a journey you made where you learned something new

Essay topics:

describe a journey you made where you learned something new

well, I'm going to talk about an excursion which I went to travel to a foreign country last week. this is Thai Lan. Firstly, I travelled by plane, it took me 2 hours to arrive. Secondly, I felt very nervous and excited which I looked forward about this trip. Actually, it wasn't disappointed for me. Thai Lan is stunning, I'm really broadening my horizons and attracted by animate/bustling this city modern. During the trip, I used public transport instead of private vehicles for the commuting costs is cheap. As well, I saw a lot of people to includes local and overseas people when I went sight-seeing. they are very intimate and wonderful, we created plenty of intrigue conversation. besides that, I'm experienced different cultures and traditions and learned a new language. More importantly, I arrived in popular tourist destinations/famous tourist attractions which is attracted millions of tourists and saw spectacular landscapes, wildlife, and plants. Nevertheless, the recent development of industry was a result in posing a serious threat to the environment and destroy natural habitats. Finally, I'd like to say that Thai Lan was a great way to relax and reduce stress and brought a wide range of benefits for me. I think it was the best journey I've ever made.

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Average: 8.1 (78 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, finally, first, firstly, if, look, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, well, i think, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1059.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 211.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01895734597 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12911798261 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672985781991 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4540555723 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.6428571429 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0714285714 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.044736294694 0.244688304435 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0169342474397 0.084324248473 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417256346215 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.044736294694 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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