Over the past few years, young people has follow famous celebrities as their role models. Some people often believe that the young generation should follow the footstep of those successful personals, others maintain that this idea is not advisable. This essay will discuss the reason why youngsters should not be encouraged to imitate glamorous movie stars as their role models.
Celebrities who adapt the luxurious lifestyles should not be the role model of young people because it will influence young generation's mindset in a negative way. This lifestyle encourage youngster to spend money they cannot afford. For instance, nowadays, concerning numbers of teenagers are interested on buying expensive clothes and going to five-star restaurants. Hence, youngsters, who are prone to peer influences should not be encouraged to follow this step.
Furthermore, the genuineness of contents show in media are questionable. Superstars always show the better part of their lives and kept who they really are from the public. For example, in order to boost the viewership and gain more fame, celebrities are involved in unhealthy rivalry and willing to use themselves as objects of interests. Therefore, young people who are still immature unable to judge the authenticity and are vulnerable in this case.
This essay discussed how sports and movie stars expose more of their luxurious lifestyles than their true selves, which can influence youngster in a negative way. I am consummately accord why glamorous celebrities should not be the role models for the younger generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'followed'.
Suggestion: followed
...er the past few years, young people has follow famous celebrities as their role models...
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Line 1, column 50, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...past few years, young people has follow famous celebrities as their role models. Some people often...
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Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
... people because it will influence young generations mindset in a negative way. This lifesty...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ill influence young generations mindset in a negative way. This lifestyle encourage youngster to ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e selves, which can influence youngster in a negative way. I am consummately accord why glamorous...
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Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'accorded'.
Suggestion: accorded
...er in a negative way. I am consummately accord why glamorous celebrities should not be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, if, really, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 31.9359605911 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 1207.87684729 111% => OK
No of words: 246.0 242.827586207 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43089430894 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81263214744 2.71678728327 104% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 139.433497537 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 379.143842365 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2916109695 50.4703680194 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.769230769 104.977214359 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9230769231 20.9669160288 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.25397266985 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.33497536946 112% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.076579224034 0.242375264174 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265583528875 0.0925447433944 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312587391119 0.071462118173 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0522845703302 0.151781067708 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307803847493 0.0609392437508 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 12.6369458128 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.1260098522 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32886699507 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 55.0591133005 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.94827586207 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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