Lifestyle affects health, how should health/ medical department responds?

The 21st century has witnessed numerous disease due to the hectic and busy lifestyle of the people. Majority member of society is facing severe illnesses like dementia and depression due to anxiety and sedentary lifestyle. Most of the time patients affected by such lifestyle disease are not aware of root causes and its remedies due to lack of knowledge. Hence, department of health and medicine have a paramount role to spread knowledge and educate citizen affected by lifestyle disease.

To begin with, health and a medical department can enlight societies with enormous positive steps, first, they should run mass academic campaigns on the causes and steps to eradicate lifestyle diseases. They should promote a healthy work culture, educate people about the benefits of exercise, healthy eating, and adequate sleep. For instance, recently my city council has arranged a mass campaign for spreading awareness which included seminars in schools, colleges, private and government offices. Moreover, they schedule free yoga sessions across the city. This steps by health and the medical department have shown positive response and a dramatic decrease in fatal lifestyle disease.

Additionally, the health department can instill a mindset of healthy eating and show detrimental impacts of junk foods on health. Furthermore, the government should impose a fat tax to control wise spread junk food eating culture. For example, Fat tax implemented in my country have ripped profound advantages in reduction of such junk food.

In conclusion, from the above example, it is evident that health and medical departments can play a vital and pivotal role in the betterment of society affected by severe lifestyle disease.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.5418719212 28% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 8.36945812808 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 5.94088669951 34% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 20.9802955665 43% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1207.87684729 121% => OK
No of words: 267.0 242.827586207 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4531835206 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 3.92707691288 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70835983691 2.71678728327 100% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 139.433497537 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588014981273 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 379.143842365 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5024630542 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7748627808 50.4703680194 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 104.977214359 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.9669160288 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.25397266985 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345786363183 0.242375264174 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115619168455 0.0925447433944 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114711087744 0.071462118173 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209437444678 0.151781067708 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519618440711 0.0609392437508 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 12.6369458128 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 53.1260098522 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 11.5310837438 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 55.0591133005 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.3980295567 96% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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