Some people believe that human behavior can be changed by laws; others argue that laws have little effect on human behavior. Which opinion do you agree with? Please explain.

Most teenager nowadays they end up to be married at an earlier aged.Before they can find a well paid job .

First, As you can see in some rural areas there are a lots of couple who decide to have a family even without finishing a highschool. Because they believe that if a person is very responsible enough to raise their children they can do it without any hindrance.If a women get pregnant suddenly she can decide to return to go back to school if they like in order to get a better job in the near future for their children's education or daily expenses. Like for instance I have a classmate when we are secondary in high school she get pregnant already and decide to get married as a young age. But she still continue studying until she deliver her baby , our school didn't tell him to stop to go school in fact some teachers are encouraging her to finish her studies so that in the time that her child grew up she can find a good job. I believe its up to the person if she is responsible enough and can manage same task at a time.

Secondly,In our modern life in this word sometimes parent cant do anything if there siblings want to have a family even without consulting both parents. Our society and peers of our children are one of the major influences , as they can see what's happening in their surroundings they might think that it is very easy to raise a family .But still if you are a talented and good in business you can get a job by your own profit.Like for example a Korean businessman thru online buy and sell now as you can see she make a big profit and have a two store in downtown area .Finishing studies is not all the time is beneficial to all humankind.

Therefore, in conclusion we can't say all the time that we should be lucky in finding a good job because we have a degree ,we should kept in mind its depend on the person's ability how to tackle her own pathway in life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 20.9802955665 234% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 31.9359605911 157% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.75862068966 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1207.87684729 128% => OK
No of words: 360.0 242.827586207 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.28611111111 5.00649968141 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 3.92707691288 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43001441585 2.71678728327 89% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 139.433497537 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.580463131201 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 379.143842365 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.57093596059 89% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6551724138 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.5024630542 195% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.413587809 50.4703680194 235% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.444444444 104.977214359 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.0 20.9669160288 191% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3333333333 7.25397266985 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 5.33497536946 675% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103851716948 0.242375264174 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495753908104 0.0925447433944 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0243621525513 0.071462118173 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0600792296397 0.151781067708 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249797515887 0.0609392437508 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 12.6369458128 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 53.1260098522 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.9458128079 151% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.19 11.5310837438 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32886699507 96% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 55.0591133005 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.94827586207 181% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.3980295567 173% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.5123152709 171% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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