Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences.
Recently, the phenomenon of funding for advertisement at school by sponsors and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of introducing materials by advertisement is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that positive effects of placing the advertisement at schools can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
From a social standpoint, placing advertisements at school can provide the society with some noticeable effects which rooted in the fact that merits of introducing healthy foods, as well as educational products, are inextricably bound up. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered the influence of advertisement on students’ intellectual skills to promote their public awareness. Thus beneficial ramification of both advertising campaign and advertising space can apparently bound up.
Within the realm of science, placing the advertisement at school might increase the consequences of distracting students from the education. Moreover, fundamental aspects of misleading advertisement on processed foods would relate to this reality that the demerits of tempting students to eat junk foods pertain to advertising agents. As a tangible example, some scientific research undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that the downside of using schools as a tool of marketing is correlated negatively with exploiting students.
To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the benefits of placing and funding the advertisement at school outweigh its drawbacks. Not only do the advantages of advertising modern educational devices prove the significance of advertising companies, but also pinpoint practical implications.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.5418719212 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 31.9359605911 141% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1207.87684729 139% => OK
No of words: 285.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89473684211 5.00649968141 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45863121569 2.71678728327 127% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 139.433497537 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60701754386 0.580463131201 105% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 379.143842365 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.2475809036 50.4703680194 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.727272727 104.977214359 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.9669160288 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 7.25397266985 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204357561677 0.242375264174 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080254410978 0.0925447433944 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372962437215 0.071462118173 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125139698141 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224743138986 0.0609392437508 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 12.6369458128 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 53.1260098522 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.9458128079 141% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.18 11.5310837438 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.64 8.32886699507 128% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 55.0591133005 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.94827586207 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.5123152709 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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