Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a women’s role should be limited to taking care of house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why. Include specific example and details.
In the statement, there is an opinion amongst people that some women must work to excel in their careers whereas some believe that women must be restricted to household shores. In my opinion I feel that every human being must be given equal changes to excel at whatever they do. In this case, women must be given equal opportunity, let us look at a few examples how women have added value to our lives.
To begin with, let us look at the social sector. The one name that rings a bell is Ms. Yousufzai Malala. This young girl’s grit for education for the girl child is exemplary. She has stood the test of her times to see to it that every child, particularly girl, receives education. Education is the fist step for any women to excel in their careers of their choice.
Secondly, let us look as Indira Nooyi. She has redefined the way corporates run businesses. She is a true example how given an opportunity how women can excel in their careers and give a different dimension to business.
Careers does not mean work at the corporate life, it means in sports too. Let us look at two phenomenal players who have defined womens sports. Martina Navratilova in tennis and Ms. Nadia Comaneci in gymnastics. They have shown that how women given a chance and become role model in life as well.
Many women have fought for women’s emancipation and have shown the world that all are equal and every individual brings a different aspect to a situation which can help the world a much better place. Thus, to conclude, looking at some of the examples mentioned above, women must be given equal opportunity to excel in their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, i feel, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 20.9802955665 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 31.9359605911 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1207.87684729 112% => OK
No of words: 290.0 242.827586207 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65517241379 5.00649968141 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47939427224 2.71678728327 91% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 139.433497537 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541379310345 0.580463131201 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.0 379.143842365 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4114920132 50.4703680194 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4117647059 104.977214359 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0588235294 20.9669160288 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 7.25397266985 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 2.91625615764 309% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295108647234 0.242375264174 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893069318676 0.0925447433944 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918795524385 0.071462118173 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163255057968 0.151781067708 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990517166316 0.0609392437508 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 12.6369458128 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.1260098522 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.9458128079 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 11.5310837438 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32886699507 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.94827586207 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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