"War is the inevitable outcome of life"Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement. Support your point of view with reasons and/ or examples from your own experience, observations or reading.

Essay topics:

"War is the inevitable outcome of life"
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement. Support your point of view with reasons and/ or examples from your own experience, observations or reading.

Since the beginning of the 21st century, some countries, such as USA and Russia, have adopted doing wars in other countries, especially in the Middle East region to cover their citizens needs. Some people believe that creating wars is necessary where the powerful countries cover their basic requirements, while others argue that countries should adopt different methods to cover their needs rather than attacking other countries. This essay will discuss the reason why powerful countries must adopt peaceful methods to obtain their initial needs rather than doing wars which lead to kill
a lot of people and spread of poverty and violence.

War is not inevitable of life and the strong countries should stop making wars. People can live in peaceful without creating wars through exchanging their needs with the week countries. Recent research, which was conducted in the Cambridge university, that the earth is full of resources that cover the increasing number of people, and wars lead to kill more than two million human yearly. Therefore, it seems clear that the war should be stopped and countries should adopt new strategies to cover their needs.

On the other hand, some people think that the distribution of resources on the earth surface is illegal, where some countries own more than 90% of earth's resources. For example, Saudi Arabia owns more than 78% of earth's oil. But these people are unaware of the fact that some countries could be rich of some materials but poor with others. Thus, making wars is not the right solution to maintain life.

In conclusion, this essay discussed the reasons why countries should adopt new strategies to cover their needs and creating wars is not the right solution. In my opinion, I am inclined to believe that countries should share their needs with other countries, and a new polices should be developed to control the exchanging materials between countries.

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Average: 5.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 589, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ather than doing wars which lead to kill a lot of people and spread of poverty an...
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Line 8, column 263, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[2]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...e their needs with other countries, and a new polices should be developed to control ...
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Line 8, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...exchanging materials between countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 5.94088669951 202% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1207.87684729 133% => OK
No of words: 313.0 242.827586207 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13738019169 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44470538711 2.71678728327 90% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 139.433497537 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495207667732 0.580463131201 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 379.143842365 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.931034482759 322% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6746639687 50.4703680194 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.692307692 104.977214359 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.9669160288 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.25397266985 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 6.9802955665 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 2.75862068966 362% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0946686938674 0.242375264174 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467128398866 0.0925447433944 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0263607835788 0.071462118173 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0542786526156 0.151781067708 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314131536341 0.0609392437508 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 12.6369458128 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.1260098522 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 11.5310837438 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32886699507 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.94827586207 181% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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