One should look upon every aspects and evaluate the all factors before prohibiting the cell phone while driving. Lecturer, cogently, stated some facts related with the usage of cell phone , which suggests that, cell phone usage is not only contributing factor of Road traffic accident.According to recent study, woman pointed out so many reasons of road traffic accident other than talking on mobile.
First, Passage states that, Mobile usage has increase from past year, which lead to serious safety problems of drivers.In the other words, cell phone usage is the main contributing factor of accidents.Lecturer argues that, the major cause of 80% accidents is tension. In addition, talking on cell phone is not only factor, but there are several other factors which increases the risk of the accidents, such as, drowsiness, talking with the passengers, reaching for an object.
Secondly, the lecturer says that, according to video tap evidences, distractions like reaching for an item, talking with passengers are the causes which are responsible for accidents.However, across the world, cellphones are useful device for reporting an emergency call for the accidents. Further more, there are 100,000 cases are noted in which, cell phones are used for reporting emergency condition like, Mechanical problem on high way, accident on high way. In this way, cell phones have reduced risk and indeed, saved so many lives.
In conclusion, there must be proper evaluation of the contributing factor before accusation.cell phone talking can be one factor of accidents , but after analyzing facts, one can overlook the concern regarding cell phone as , cell phone is the only media of communication during life threatening situation.
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