Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.
Do you think this is positive or negative development?
In recent years, more and more people throughout the world have tended to spend a considerable amount of money on tickets for sporting and cultural occasions. This trend prompts a controversial topic of whether or not these expenses are worthwhile and would result in positive developments. I firmly hold the view that attending these events has apparent advantages in both personal and societal scale.
First and foremost, attending these events can contribute to relatively more stable society. Without any doubt, observing a spot’s competition among other sport enthusiastic individuals or being an audience of a spectacular cultural layout, such as a live musical concert, would alleviate the stress level of the attendees. Considering the hectic lifestyle of members of the modern societies, this approach of maintaining the stress level within normal range seems to be absolutely imperative for preserving the mental health of the public. Accordingly, being part of these events can pave the way for keeping the stability within the society in order.
More importantly, these occasions have the capability of making the grounds for inner-nation interactions. Through these events, people can meet other individuals possessing the same interests with diverse ideologies. In doing so, not only the members of the community can find their peers and avoid isolation, but also modify their perceptions in life and deepen the bond of the society.
Last but not least, attending the sports and cultural programs provide the support required for the survival and development of the artistic and athletic careers. Spending money on the entrance tickets for these events and also, being an enthusiastic audience for them applauding their talents, would be truly inspiring and motivating for them which would lead them to endeavor more. Therefore the likelihood of making progress and achieving prosperity in this condition would increase to the great extent.
Taken together, I subscribe to the idea that it is undoubtedly beneficial for any society and its members to attend in various sporting and cultural events, due to the fact that it can maintain the stability and unity of the community. In addition, this would encourage the individuals who are active in numerous fields of sports or arts to expand their potentials and grow.
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- Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.Do you think this is positive or negative development? 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... trend prompts a controversial topic of whether or not these expenses are worthwhile and would...
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Line 4, column 384, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...which would lead them to endeavor more. Therefore the likelihood of making progress and a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39890710383 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86655124984 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560109289617 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4738646649 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.733333333 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163457034937 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528678840586 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503107992203 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963016347184 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463508845295 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.