The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
We are living in an era where technology and industries has come together and created societies of wide range of luxuries and conveniences to make our life easier in order to achieve our full potential unless however unless we are not aware of how and why we choose different choices, we will be stuck within this circle of luxuries and conveniences that would control our lives.
Internet has allowed us access to unlimited number of choices, opportunities, potentials and possibilities. for instance, an aspiring young woman, in her early twenties, could use the access to internet not only to meet new people, enjoy movies, or games, also discover her path, skills and potentials by reading and opening up to different ideologies, and deep reading in different subject which will be the key to built upon the way to becoming an influential entrepreneur in creating social change and the lives of many people. The internet not only a tool to build up networks of meeting new people, and enjoying different choices but also paving the way to empowerment and social change and making a better future.
On the other hand, the overly usage of the Internet could lead to insecure attachment to the virtual world and creating a whole reality in this virtual world, resulting in introversion and lack of social skills, health or physical problems caused by lack of movement and exercise and excessive misuse of computer or video games. This may cause to limit learning the skills and abilities gained through experience, practice and active engagement in daily life experiences that teaches us how to be human and how to deal with people and situations.
Finally, the misuse of luxuries and conveniences, such as the internet. The urge to access the fastest and finest internet and other luxurious services , makes people from the upper class run in the endless loop of constantly changing or upgrading their phones to the latest versions released in market. Which may highly convert them into highly consuming societies, that are distracted and occupied by dedicating their money earned from work to buy unneeded products, they fail to realize the most important things in life that really makes them strong and independent, such as quality time with family and friends, exploring life with its variety of different experiences, such as travelling, exploring, experimenting new things, defying fears, coming out of their comfort zone every once in a while and understanding the meaning of life. All this will naturally flow into helping them in their own personal development psychologically, spiritually and physically.
- The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. 53
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, really, so, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 14.8657303371 229% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23708920188 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85704495552 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589201877934 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 85.0 23.0359550562 369% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 201.938604531 60.3974514979 334% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 446.2 118.986275619 375% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 85.2 23.4991977007 363% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.4 5.21951772744 372% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136104527087 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638754797773 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594024263102 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0725847635089 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623784245344 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 45.9 14.1392134831 325% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -14.8 48.8420337079 -30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.4 12.1743820225 299% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.3 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.45 8.38706741573 148% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 11.8971910112 240% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.0 11.2143820225 321% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 36.0 11.7820224719 306% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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