Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
By and large, it's established beyond the doubt that parents should more aware of the upbringing of their children and try to be best in this contex. It is noticeable to be mentioned that the children are the cornerstone of the each society. Nowadays, parents are very concern about how they can perepare their child for the future which they can be successed in their life and gain the countless experiences. As far as Iam concern, the part time job for children next to their collage is the best condition due to make them being readiy infront of arduous situation. After regarding different factors into consideration, I totally support this notion that I firmly agree that the part-time job is best way for preparing the teenage children. In the following, I will elaborate more details about my point of view.
The first and the most exquisite point need to be mentioned is that part-time job make the teenage children become responsible. The majority of teeneger are not responsile in their life and roughly try to be relax. The reason which dramatically is influencial on this behaivior is their parents, they could not alter their children easily, but if they try to enhance their children for finding the appropriate part-time job, this will help them. As matter of the fact, when the children go to work - which this job is related to their age and not very hard - the children have to be on time, try to show their ability to their boss and being responsilble. The job not onley make them responsible in their job but this effect on their personality and never changed. Thus, part-time job can have lots of benefit for the children.
There is another faactor that deseves some words is that part-time job put the children in the varaiety arduous conditions and evaluated them. the children should be awared that their parents always can not support them in the context of financial or etc. they should sence that in the society, they will face with different people and situation, so, how they should behaive? According to the survey has been conducted by Tehran university demonstrated that families which encourage their children to have part-time job, their children have successful future in compare to the children always be dependent to their parents. Consequently, the job for children make them be independent and have powerfull characteristics.
To put it all in nutshell, by considering all the aformentioned reasons, I agree with this notion that part-time job is the best way for prepare them in the future. As a whole, part-time job not onley is more effective in their charecteristics but also enhance them to have best future due to they can face with real life and evaluate themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...experiences. As far as Iam concern, the part time job for children next to their collage ...
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Line 1, column 695, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...t I firmly agree that the part-time job is best way for preparing the teenage children....
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...their life and roughly try to be relax. The reason which dramatically is influencia...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... arduous conditions and evaluated them. the children should be awared that their pa...
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Line 5, column 517, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...ourage their children to have part-time job, their children have successful future ...
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Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the best'.
Suggestion: have the best
...harecteristics but also enhance them to have best future due to they can face with real l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, so, thus, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91086956522 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72411433278 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436956521739 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9729709485 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.894736842 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397461885152 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151193227221 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764775787216 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294001919486 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313741207305 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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